Tom Cruise, You Need a Stronger Thesis Statement
The main thing that strikes me about Tom Cruise's Scientology babbling (you can watch the controversial video here) is that he is in dire need of a Freshman Composition course. Here are some quotes:
"We have the ability to create new and better realities"
"I know that we have an opportunity to really help the first time, to effectively change people's lives."
"It's looking at what needs to be done and saying 'okay! Am I gonna do it or not gonna do it?'"
"Go and learn it! Don't pretend you know it, it's, like, we're here to help!"
"You see things the way they are. In all its glory, in all its complexity."
Passive voice? Check. Inspecific pronouns? Check. Vague assertions without accompanying concrete examples? Check. It's like the worst paper on "how the media affects your perceptions of things" I've ever encountered. Tom Cruise, get thee to a Strunk and White and report back when you have something to say! (Because if you can sound so crazy saying nothing, I'll pretty much listen to you say anything....)